"John, please, for our sake, don't give up"
John looked up, his heart heavy. Blank eyes stared into Peggy's pleading eyes. All life gone out of him, he felt drained, washed out. How on earth could he go on.
Was it really only two days since his world had been taken from under his feet? Until then he'd been a normal guy, husband and father, living a normal life, then...
He felt Peggy's hands on his shoulders, gently but firmly shaking him, her face close to his. He couldn't look at her. Gentle hands cupped his face. His eyes filled with tears, blurring his vision. He let the tears flow.
"John, look at me. It's going to be alright. We'll fight it together. We've been down before and we've always managed to rise up again. You, me and Sammy. We'll challenge it with every fibre in our bodies, with all our strength. We'll win John, believe me".
John slowly lifted his head, starred at this incredible woman. The love he felt for her at that moment caused his heart to overflow with affection and admiration. This strong being, who had been told that she's dying of incurable cancer.
John's glance fell on his beloved son, playing at his feet. Lifting Sammy he put his arm around his wife. This was his life and he wasn't going to lose it without a fight. He realized it was going to be a long, hard struggle, but they would get to the top.
......I wrote this short story for "Ascension". A Short Fiction Story Contest being hosted by Jason Evans on his blog http://clarityofnight.blogspot.com/
John looked up, his heart heavy. Blank eyes stared into Peggy's pleading eyes. All life gone out of him, he felt drained, washed out. How on earth could he go on.
Was it really only two days since his world had been taken from under his feet? Until then he'd been a normal guy, husband and father, living a normal life, then...
He felt Peggy's hands on his shoulders, gently but firmly shaking him, her face close to his. He couldn't look at her. Gentle hands cupped his face. His eyes filled with tears, blurring his vision. He let the tears flow.
"John, look at me. It's going to be alright. We'll fight it together. We've been down before and we've always managed to rise up again. You, me and Sammy. We'll challenge it with every fibre in our bodies, with all our strength. We'll win John, believe me".
John slowly lifted his head, starred at this incredible woman. The love he felt for her at that moment caused his heart to overflow with affection and admiration. This strong being, who had been told that she's dying of incurable cancer.
John's glance fell on his beloved son, playing at his feet. Lifting Sammy he put his arm around his wife. This was his life and he wasn't going to lose it without a fight. He realized it was going to be a long, hard struggle, but they would get to the top.
......I wrote this short story for "Ascension". A Short Fiction Story Contest being hosted by Jason Evans on his blog http://clarityofnight.blogspot.com/
The story had to be inspired by the above picture and shouldn't hold more than 250 words. It's the first time I've written a short story, never mind enter a contest, but it was fun. The contest has just closed and judging is now going on. Feel free to vote for me if you think my story is worthy enough. Mine is Entry # 106...Thanks......
I remember reading your story. I can't believe this is your first effort. Good luck narrowing the field down and on your entry!
ReplyDeleteIt's always fun trying to pick the best stories and seeing if they match the judges' choices.
Thanks JR
ReplyDeleteGood luck to you too!
It's been fun all the way!
as i commented before, this was brilliant! loved the emotions involved and you gave life to it through your words! beautifully written. all the very best for the contest.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sawan, glad you liked it and thanks for becoming a follower of my blog.
ReplyDeleteAll the best to you too for the contest. Been great fun, hasn't it?
hey margaret. i liked the story... very strong emotions. wish you all the best... and keep writing.
ReplyDeleteof course it was :)
ReplyDeletethat was one of the most touching stories in contest :)
ReplyDelete@ Lala
ReplyDeleteThanks for your good wishes, glad you liked the story. Take care..
@ Lena
Thank you very much. There were so many terrific stories, yours included. Good luck..
Weaving such an inspirational story is a great piece of work.
ReplyDeleteWith such a riveting plot in hand, i believe, if you were allowed to write more than 250 words, you would have taken the reader into an altogether different world.
You are outstanding Margaret, keep writing more and more short stories…
Thanks Charan for your kind words. The contest is over now and I know I have a lot to learn about writing. I'm looking forward to learning and improving as time goes on.
ReplyDeleteA really good attempt, dear.
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I myself had converted.
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